Comments on: The Galleon http://cjlevinson.com/2008/03/16/the-galleon/ The Blog of CJ Levinson Mon, 13 Feb 2012 19:42:25 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.com/ By: Phyxius http://cjlevinson.com/2008/03/16/the-galleon/#comment-6695 Tue, 01 Apr 2008 20:46:25 +0000 http://cjwriter.com/?p=374#comment-6695 Excellent writing. Once I finished I couldn’t help but shiver from the awful sense of loneliness that I gained…

Very Nice.

CJ: I’m glad you liked it, Phyxius. I wanted that sense of loneliness to reverberate at the end of the poem; it’s not just the deaths of these people but also of an entire world that is forgotten and I found that haunting… I can’t help but wonder if it’ll be the same for our world, one day…

Thanks for stopping by, and for the kind words.

]]> By: B0bbyG http://cjlevinson.com/2008/03/16/the-galleon/#comment-6694 Sun, 23 Mar 2008 22:37:56 +0000 http://cjwriter.com/?p=374#comment-6694 That was awe inspiring. Quite possibly your best piece of writing I’ve yet read.

Sorry for not commenting earlier.

That was the best poem I have read for some time.

CJ: Thanks Bobby! Wow, that’s such a wonderful compliment. I’m still quite new to writing poetry compared to my fiction, so receiving all this feedback is quite overwhelming.

And I’m just happy whenever people have time to drop around. I’ve been busy the last week myself, so I’ve got to get back into the swing of commenting and posting again.

Thanks again for the kind words. I’m so glad you enjoyed it. ;)

]]> By: Bharat Iyer http://cjlevinson.com/2008/03/16/the-galleon/#comment-6696 Thu, 20 Mar 2008 19:15:34 +0000 http://cjwriter.com/?p=374#comment-6696 Great poem, hauntingly beautiful. And as the others have already said, it leaves you yearning for more. I like the second stanza alot, especially the last 3 lines.

And it kind of reminded me of John Masefield’s poetry. :P

CJ: Thanks Bharat! Those last few lines are some of my favourites too; I just had this idea of the wind whistling through the wreck and it stuck in my mind… it took some fiddling but it conveys the feeling quite well in the end.

Masefield is my favourite poet and I love Cargoes; that and Shelley’s Ozymandias inspired a lot of this. But if you can’t be inspired by the greats, what’s the point of reading, eh? ;)

]]> By: amandzing http://cjlevinson.com/2008/03/16/the-galleon/#comment-6692 Tue, 18 Mar 2008 19:22:31 +0000 http://cjwriter.com/?p=374#comment-6692 I open my mind and i can see the bones of the ship, perhaps a twinkle of gold in the sand, hear the wind whistling over the stump of the mast….what stories those ghosts would tell if we could stop and listen…

beautiful

CJ: I love that mental image; the wind passing over the ship, parting the sand, whispering its stories… I can still see the final scene in my mind, the graves, each with their own sad story. It’s changed a little but I can’t imagine it any differently now.

Thanks for the kind words, Amanda, and for stopping by. ;)

]]> By: marnini http://cjlevinson.com/2008/03/16/the-galleon/#comment-6693 Tue, 18 Mar 2008 13:19:09 +0000 http://cjwriter.com/?p=374#comment-6693 That was beautiful and made me feel very sad for those who died alone. The image from the picture brought your words to life even more. :) Maribeth

CJ: Thanks Maribeth. I felt sad writing those last few lines too, but they were the reason I wanted to write the poem as well, so I’m glad it touched you that much.

I was very lucky with the picture. I was looking for something for hours and just stumbled upon it… now it seems perfect. I guess it was meant to be. ;)

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